DOL 3
Sentence 1: mr. palonia says that there are some athletes who are on this here team that believe noone should not have any practice
Correct: Mr. Palonia says that there are some athletes on this team who believe that everyone should practice.
Sentence 2: to ensure success they should require those in the project the ones doing the experiment too have new lab equipment
Correct: To ensure success, the teachers should require- the ones doing the experiment- to have new lab equipment.
DOL 4
Sentence 1: darnel dont have no reason too question them instructions but he does want a explanation for this here exam
Correct:Darnel doesn't have a reason to question the those instructions, but he does want an explanation for this exam.
Sentence 2: me and olga went downtown we went to buy new notebooks we need them for class we also need them for our long term project
Correct: Olga and I went downtown to buy new notebook for class and for our long term project.
DOL 5
Sentence 1: yes terri won the game but at the time we dont know that she had
Correct: Yes, Terri won the game, but at the time; we didn't know that she had.
Sentence 2: the affect of the program cancellation which bothered most of we members was to end the project before we can finish
Correct: The effect of the program cancellation, bothered most of the us, members, was by ending the project before we could finish.
DOL 6
Sentence 1: because you should of heard their voice when i told them how there vacaion time would be effected
Correct: You should have heard their voices when I told them how their vacation would be affected.
Sentence 2: irregardless of what grandpa says itll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration
Correct: Regardless of what Grandpa says, it'll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration.
DOL 7
Sentence 1: rob commentd that us neighbors has got to be welcoming to children outside of our neighborhood he mentioned to us
Correct: Rob commented that our neighbors should welcome children from outside of our neighborhood.
Sentence 2: neither ben or me because we hae not read the assignment knew the definition of the word chide
Correct: Because we had not read the assignment, neither Ben nor I knew the definition of the word chide.
DOL 8
Sentence 1: marcus a serious athlete tries very hard im sure he will see alot of action in todays game
Correct: Marcus, a serious athlete, who tried very hard; I'm sure he will see a lot of action in today's game.
Sentence 2: the reace between the three relay teams is close none of the 3 however are giving up hope of winning
Correct: The race among the three relay teams is close; however, none of the three is giving up hope of winning.
DOL 9
Sentence 1: ms perez the science teacher stated within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity did because it changed the world
Correct:Ms. Perrez, the science teacher, stated," Within a short time, free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity."
Sentence 2: yesterday mom told us that whomever borrows her new sweater have to take it to the cleaners
Correct: Yesterday, Mom told us that whoever borrowed her new sweater has to take it to the cleaners.
DOL 10
Sentence 1: our Social Studies teacher asked us who have her as a teacher to write reports ont he south she said it was to be an emphasis on african americans
Correct: Our social studies teacher asked us to write reports on the South, with an emphasis on African Americans.
Sentence 2: well i think someones mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert
Correct: I think somebody's mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert.
DOL 11
Sentence 1: my oldest sister whose going to live in the new east town apartments wants youre help moving in tonite
Correct: My oldest sister, who's going to live in the New East Town Apartments, wants your help moving tonight.
Sentence 2: at the end of her speech amanda said if you need farther informations dont hesitate to ask me for more information
Correct:At the end of her speech, Amanda said, "if you need further information, don't hesitate to ask me.
DOL 12
Sentence 1:having read the novel the man in the iron mask i wanna find out more about the french revolution
Correct: Having read the novel The Man in the Iron Mask; I want to find out more about the French Revolution.
Sentence 2: there were to many things to do i couldnt finish my homework practicing my soccer skills or go to my friends concert
Correct: There were too many things to do; I couldn't finish my homework, practice my soccer skills, or go to my friend's concert.
DOL 13
Sentence 1: mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which was assigned to germany after world war 2 helped maintain peace in that there country
Correct: Mr. Guarino told us that the twenty-fourth Corp, which was assigned to Germany after World War 2, helped maintain peace in that country.
Sentence 2: having finished her foreign exchange trip a plane ticket was requested to the united states at the end of her foreign exchange trip
Correct:Having finished her foreign exchange trip, Samantha requested a plane ticket to the United States.
DOL 14
Sentence 1: i reviewed the book real good i received a good grade on the report said Sonia
Correct: "I reviewed the book really well and received a good grade on the report," said Sonia.
Sentence 2: although we had 25 inches of show last Winter the bushes appear to be alright pedro noted
Correct: "Although we had twenty-five inches of snow last winter, the bushes appear to be all right," Pedro noted.
DOL 15
Sentence 1: he was incidentally unable to attend hour 15th high-school reunion he just couldn't make it because he lives too far away
Correct: He was, incidentally, unable to attend our fifteenth high school reunion because he lives too far away.
Sentence 2: it says that irregardless of the effect of poor weather the shakespearean play romeo and juliet will be sold out
Correct: Bob says that regardless of poor weather, the Shakespearean play Romeo and Juliet will be sold out.
DOL 16
Sentence 1: you should of followed three steps first open the hood secondly checking the level and lastly add more oil
Correct: You should have followed the three steps: first, open the hood; second, check the level; last, add more oil.
Sentence 2: although my dog is different than yours we wont have no problem walking them to together
Correct: Although my dog is different from yours, we won't have any problem walking them together.
DOL 17
Sentence 1: does caroline know weather raul might of come to the class council meeting at 600pm or was he off of student government
Correct:Does Caroline know whether Raul might have come to the class council meeting at 6:00 P.M. or was he off student government?
Sentence 2: there are 3 qualities that are existing that give this field hockey team the better advantage in the league a terrific goalie a great offense and a winning spirit
Correct: There are three qualities that give this field hockey team the advantage in the league: a terrific goalie, a great offense, and a winning spirit.
DOL 18
Sentence 1: walking quiet along the road it was impossible to see that car that was speeding
Correct: Walking quietly along the road, it was impossible for me to see the speeding car.
Sentence 2: after the race begins delia take these here medals to the track club at the school located East of here
Correct: After the race began, Delia, took these medals to the track club to the east of the school.
DOL 19
Sentence 1: nothing could be farther from the truth mr perez stated than your comments
Correct: "Nothing could be further from the truth," Mr. Perez stated, "than your comments."
Sentence 2: she was quite young no more than 26 when she earned her doctorate consequently she began her career early
Correct: She was quite young, no more than twenty-six, when she earned her doctorate; consequently, she began her career early.
DOL 20
Sentence 1: yes their going to welcome whomever want to come to the rally weather democrat or republican
Correct: Yes, they're going to welcome whoever wants to come to the rally, whether Democrat or Republican.
Sentence 2: this car a 1966 mustang is now extremely valuable irregardless of what he tv show classic cars reports
Correct: This car, a 1966 Mustang, is now extremely valuable, regardless of what the TV show Classic Cars reports.
DOL 21
Sentence 1: because it snowed heavy last night so its alright if noone comes to basketball practice because of all the snow
Correct: Because it snowed heavily last night, it's alright if no one comes to basketball practice.
Sentence 2: they mentioned i believe that on january 2 2000 this here building was seventy five years old
Correct: They mentioned that on January 2, 2000, this building was seventy-five years old.
DOL 22
Sentence 1: follow some simple rules and youll succeed listen in class doing your homework and learn as much as possible
Correct: Follow some simple rules and you'll succeed: listen in class, do your homework, and learn as much as possible.
Sentence 2: in order to interest larry his role in the play has got to be made more challenging martina stated
Correct: "In order to interest Larry, his role in the play has to be more challenging, Martina stated.
TERRY KIM
DOL 1: NA
DOL 2: NA
DOL 3
Sentence 1: mr. palonia says that there are some athletes who are on this here team that believe noone should not have any practice
Correct: Mr. Palonia says that there are some athletes on this team who believe that everyone should practice.
Sentence 2: to ensure success they should require those in the project the ones doing the experiment too have new lab equipment
Correct: To ensure success, the teachers should require- the ones doing the experiment- to have new lab equipment.
DOL 4
Sentence 1: darnel dont have no reason too question them instructions but he does want a explanation for this here exam
Correct:Darnel doesn't have a reason to question the those instructions, but he does want an explanation for this exam.
Sentence 2: me and olga went downtown we went to buy new notebooks we need them for class we also need them for our long term project
Correct: Olga and I went downtown to buy new notebook for class and for our long term project.
DOL 5
Sentence 1: yes terri won the game but at the time we dont know that she had
Correct: Yes, Terri won the game, but at the time; we didn't know that she had.
Sentence 2: the affect of the program cancellation which bothered most of we members was to end the project before we can finish
Correct: The effect of the program cancellation, bothered most of the us, members, was by ending the project before we could finish.
DOL 6
Sentence 1: because you should of heard their voice when i told them how there vacaion time would be effected
Correct: You should have heard their voices when I told them how their vacation would be affected.
Sentence 2: irregardless of what grandpa says itll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration
Correct: Regardless of what Grandpa says, it'll be alright to bring a friend to the family celebration.
DOL 7
Sentence 1: rob commentd that us neighbors has got to be welcoming to children outside of our neighborhood he mentioned to us
Correct: Rob commented that our neighbors should welcome children from outside of our neighborhood.
Sentence 2: neither ben or me because we hae not read the assignment knew the definition of the word chide
Correct: Because we had not read the assignment, neither Ben nor I knew the definition of the word chide.
DOL 8
Sentence 1: marcus a serious athlete tries very hard im sure he will see alot of action in todays game
Correct: Marcus, a serious athlete, who tried very hard; I'm sure he will see a lot of action in today's game.
Sentence 2: the reace between the three relay teams is close none of the 3 however are giving up hope of winning
Correct: The race among the three relay teams is close; however, none of the three is giving up hope of winning.
DOL 9
Sentence 1: ms perez the science teacher stated within a short time free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity did because it changed the world
Correct:Ms. Perrez, the science teacher, stated," Within a short time, free-electron lasers will change the world as much as the invention of electricity."
Sentence 2: yesterday mom told us that whomever borrows her new sweater have to take it to the cleaners
Correct: Yesterday, Mom told us that whoever borrowed her new sweater has to take it to the cleaners.
DOL 10
Sentence 1: our Social Studies teacher asked us who have her as a teacher to write reports ont he south she said it was to be an emphasis on african americans
Correct: Our social studies teacher asked us to write reports on the South, with an emphasis on African Americans.
Sentence 2: well i think someones mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert
Correct: I think somebody's mother should volunteer to bring the rest of us girls to the concert.
DOL 11
Sentence 1: my oldest sister whose going to live in the new east town apartments wants youre help moving in tonite
Correct: My oldest sister, who's going to live in the New East Town Apartments, wants your help moving tonight.
Sentence 2: at the end of her speech amanda said if you need farther informations dont hesitate to ask me for more information
Correct:At the end of her speech, Amanda said, "if you need further information, don't hesitate to ask me.
DOL 12
Sentence 1:having read the novel the man in the iron mask i wanna find out more about the french revolution
Correct: Having read the novel The Man in the Iron Mask; I want to find out more about the French Revolution.
Sentence 2: there were to many things to do i couldnt finish my homework practicing my soccer skills or go to my friends concert
Correct: There were too many things to do; I couldn't finish my homework, practice my soccer skills, or go to my friend's concert.
DOL 13
Sentence 1: mr. Guarino told us that the 24th corps which was assigned to germany after world war 2 helped maintain peace in that there country
Correct: Mr. Guarino told us that the twenty-fourth Corp, which was assigned to Germany after World War 2, helped maintain peace in that country.
Sentence 2: having finished her foreign exchange trip a plane ticket was requested to the united states at the end of her foreign exchange trip
Correct:Having finished her foreign exchange trip, Samantha requested a plane ticket to the United States.
DOL 14
Sentence 1: i reviewed the book real good i received a good grade on the report said Sonia
Correct: "I reviewed the book really well and received a good grade on the report," said Sonia.
Sentence 2: although we had 25 inches of show last Winter the bushes appear to be alright pedro noted
Correct: "Although we had twenty-five inches of snow last winter, the bushes appear to be all right," Pedro noted.
DOL 15
Sentence 1: he was incidentally unable to attend hour 15th high-school reunion he just couldn't make it because he lives too far away
Correct: He was, incidentally, unable to attend our fifteenth high school reunion because he lives too far away.
Sentence 2: it says that irregardless of the effect of poor weather the shakespearean play romeo and juliet will be sold out
Correct: Bob says that regardless of poor weather, the Shakespearean play Romeo and Juliet will be sold out.
DOL 16
Sentence 1: you should of followed three steps first open the hood secondly checking the level and lastly add more oil
Correct: You should have followed the three steps: first, open the hood; second, check the level; last, add more oil.
Sentence 2: although my dog is different than yours we wont have no problem walking them to together
Correct: Although my dog is different from yours, we won't have any problem walking them together.
DOL 17
Sentence 1: does caroline know weather raul might of come to the class council meeting at 600pm or was he off of student government
Correct:Does Caroline know whether Raul might have come to the class council meeting at 6:00 P.M. or was he off student government?
Sentence 2: there are 3 qualities that are existing that give this field hockey team the better advantage in the league a terrific goalie a great offense and a winning spirit
Correct: There are three qualities that give this field hockey team the advantage in the league: a terrific goalie, a great offense, and a winning spirit.
DOL 18
Sentence 1: walking quiet along the road it was impossible to see that car that was speeding
Correct: Walking quietly along the road, it was impossible for me to see the speeding car.
Sentence 2: after the race begins delia take these here medals to the track club at the school located East of here
Correct: After the race began, Delia, took these medals to the track club to the east of the school.
DOL 19
Sentence 1: nothing could be farther from the truth mr perez stated than your comments
Correct: "Nothing could be further from the truth," Mr. Perez stated, "than your comments."
Sentence 2: she was quite young no more than 26 when she earned her doctorate consequently she began her career early
Correct: She was quite young, no more than twenty-six, when she earned her doctorate; consequently, she began her career early.
DOL 20
Sentence 1: yes their going to welcome whomever want to come to the rally weather democrat or republican
Correct: Yes, they're going to welcome whoever wants to come to the rally, whether Democrat or Republican.
Sentence 2: this car a 1966 mustang is now extremely valuable irregardless of what he tv show classic cars reports
Correct: This car, a 1966 Mustang, is now extremely valuable, regardless of what the TV show Classic Cars reports.
DOL 21
Sentence 1: because it snowed heavy last night so its alright if noone comes to basketball practice because of all the snow
Correct: Because it snowed heavily last night, it's alright if no one comes to basketball practice.
Sentence 2: they mentioned i believe that on january 2 2000 this here building was seventy five years old
Correct: They mentioned that on January 2, 2000, this building was seventy-five years old.
DOL 22
Sentence 1: follow some simple rules and youll succeed listen in class doing your homework and learn as much as possible
Correct: Follow some simple rules and you'll succeed: listen in class, do your homework, and learn as much as possible.
Sentence 2: in order to interest larry his role in the play has got to be made more challenging martina stated
Correct: "In order to interest Larry, his role in the play has to be more challenging, Martina stated.